#1
I remember everything you said...
Every sound you made with your fingers;
the sound of my fingers touching your skin,
which was so much lighter than it is now
with all the pain on it.
I remember the way you loved or...
I hope you loved me.
I remember when nothing went well but you never admitted it.
Do you remember that I always looked at you with the same eyes?
No matter what we've been trough.

I admire and adore you. I still do.
Last edited by Mrrula at Jan 10, 2015,
#2
o The two lines about fingers so close together gets clunky, perhaps reword or space it out?
o The ellipses would work better with a line break
o The last line would work better on it's own line.
o It's very wide, visually, perhaps look at cutting the lines down?
o I haven't had my coffee yet this morning.