#2
There is a strong feeling to this, and I see it mainly as a study of that.

Your manipulation of words is fantastic ("us-less", "feillings") and shows good attention not only to the sounds of letters but the sounds they are commonly associated with.

I read the last three words with more space between them, but other than that there is nothing i can say.
#3
Quote by doubtfulsalmon
There is a strong feeling to this, and I see it mainly as a study of that.

Your manipulation of words is fantastic ("us-less", "feillings") and shows good attention not only to the sounds of letters but the sounds they are commonly associated with.


thank you.

in all honesty, i was hoping you would comment on this. you're much more familiar with heavy experimentation and its techniques than i am. it feels good to know that i'm having some success with this new thing i'm trying.

I read the last three words with more space between them, but other than that there is nothing i can say.


i do as well, actually. i just didn't like how it looked formatting wise though. i'm going to spend some time tonight fiddling around, since i've had a little break from working on this. might just simply space it out more, and if it still doesn't look appealing to me, i might try something else.
#5
Quote by Eccer
I somehow wish there was more to it...


i do as well

but I like the experimentation, although i'm having difficulties trying to interpret it. Overlooking the experimentation there is indeed at display, a strong feeling to it, like an computerized emotion.


this was pretty much an experiment with "extreme" portmanteau words. like, how well could i take this word, and then stretch it with various misspellings/punctuation and turn one word into three.

that being said, maybe the meaning is only relevant to me (in all actuality, i know a LOT of it is). that's ok. i don't usually write with an audience in mind, and something like this is one of those things. mainly, that's why i posted it here, because i thought it was weak. i wanted something outside of my own perception looking at this.

as far as being computerized... yeah. that's how the cycle goes- mechanical, coded (like my emotions, i suppose). except this one hasn't stopped yet. i could give you the story, but that would take another hilariously long post about something completely meaningless. those could maybe be the words in between, hah. but i don't think i'll ever do that.
Last edited by Dregen at Jan 26, 2015,
#6
Don't worry about it man! I've done the same...what random shit can inspire us too, haha! I've even made a continuation of it, which is called kinosamtalen 2, story behind it is pretty meaninless too. Anyways, I don't think this is necessarily weak, but could have been improved upon maybe. But as is with art sometimes, it cannot be undone.