For someone who doesn't listen to Metal and rarely hard rock I actually enjoyed your song. It had a great length in my opinion because I never got bored while listening to it. Also I would suggest vocals but I think it sounds find as it is.

C4C maybe?:https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1668086
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infinitely far
and unsayable is now
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