Recently finished a song (in the style of death metal/deathcore) and would be really interesting in feedback on the songwriting and lyrics as such (as opposed to the recording, mix etc, which has been submitted for critique to other forums).

Here's a link to the song:

Lyrics are as follows:

I Fired First

Sever limb from limb and excavate the fleshless core
Find out what's inside if anything, anymore

Analysis of truth will duplicate the shameless lie
The adversary holds a casting vote if there's a tie

When you allocate the blame I move to the front
Proud to exclaim that I was the one
Quit that soul searching for the mystery clue
For it never had anything to do with you

Sever kin from kin, skin from skin, so as to purify
Free us from the bond of unity and testify
to the truth of singularity where egos die
The diamond in the dirt that constitutes your feeble life

Face the fact for it has come to this
A pointless cause wrought for a pointless aim
We wither and die without leaving a trace
Nothing will change and nothing will remain

So I fired first
I fired first

I'm not denying anymore

Me, it was me.
I fired first