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Palm mute, Palm mute.
Bend a note.....


Palm mute,Palm mute.
Bend, pull off....

Palm mute, Palm mute....
Heavy drumming chug uh chug.... GO!

Does this excite you?
Does it get you off?
I ****in own you!
Now scream it out.
Jump around in circles.
Do it now!
Punch somebody and sit the **** down.

You're my subordinates.
I'm in control.
The violent hokey pokey.
You'll do as you're told.

Spewing out.
Dead philosophy.
You'll eat it up.
You'll idolize me.
Impressive words.
Tantalizing.
Repeat what I say,
Scream it out, and...
Break something.

You're my subordinates.
I'm in control.
The violent hokey pokey.
You'll do as you're told.

Put your left foot out,
Put your middle fingers up.
Turn to right.
**** they're ass up!

Fight my children.
Fight like pawns.
Bring the chaos.
I am your God.

Fight my fletchlings.
Sons of my blood.
Feed on the energy.
Flee from the love.

You're my subordinates.
I'm in control.
The violent hokey pokey.
You'll do as you're told.
#2
I'd like to read more about the actual violence. Whose balls get ripped off and eaten? Whose face is melted off with a heat gun? Where are the baseball bats? You say I'm your subordinate but you're not telling me to do much specific. What do I do with my middle finger after I put it up? Should I stab someone in the eyes with my ragged fingernails, or should I commit multiple acts of sexual harrassment?

Your first question is whether it excites me, and it will be much more exciting if you include some more interesting content for readers to wrap their heads around. And of course with things like this it's all about how it's executed; if you scream anything at someone convincingly enough, it will definitely get them going.
Today I feel electric grey
I hope tomorrow, neon black