#1
my words are screaming
they beg for your submission
not in a sexual sense
but a spiritual one.
Something that connects the bodies
with tears and loss.
#2
this is a very sad piece. Lamenting. I like it. though it could be fleshed out a bit more. just my opinion.
good stuff though
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#3
This is pretty powerful, but I would make it even more concise, because I think "not is a sexual sense, but a spiritual one" is kind of jarring. If you put it like this:

my words are screaming
for your spiritual submission.
Something that connects the bodies
with tears and loss.

It retains its power and it flows better, I think.

Nice one, Ally !
#5
Quote by Magnumopus7001
I'm guessing your name is Harvey???? I could be wrong.

Harvey or Harv works just fine
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