i don't know much about mixing vocals but something makes it sound like karaoke. the vocals lack power and i think it's about equal parts performance and mixing. gut feeling says it has something to do with lack of compression or the reverb settings but tbh i really don't know how to fix it. the line "night turns into....... day" doesn't really work for me either. the pause before day is kind of awkward

there's a kinda messy edit at 1:53 where the track skips. the performance and mixing of the instruments is good so i don't have much to comment there

c4c?: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1678710