#1
Alright, guys, here's the story. This is about a woman that I'm pretty sure I've fallen in love with (the first time I've ever experienced it). We're really close friends, and have discussed that, but I can't shake the feeling no matter how hard I try. We have a lot in common. Nature lovers, same undergrad major, same music tastes (she also plays guitar and is quite good), same morals, same everything pretty much. Not only that, she's easily the most beautiful woman I have ever seen. My problem is, I won't be seeing her for a month. I'm leaving for South Carolina tonight, and when I get back, she'll be in Europe for three weeks with a guy she's liked for over a year and has only met once. She's told me about the heartache she's gone through because she continually feels like she can't trust him after all the time she's invested in it. She's also ben in two long-term relationships, both of which ended badly and have caused her to have a negatively skewed view on guys in general. I want to prove to her that I deeply care for her and have zero intentions of causing mistrust and emotional abuse. So here are the lyrics for the song I have for her called "Unparalleled".

I know, you feel defeated
Locked in the veil of tears and heartache, confusing what is real
I know, I’ve been there too
Though abruptly, celestial desire became euphoric truth

And I won’t let this pain wash away the unparalleled for eternity
You have set me in a trance, an otherworldly daze
Your crystalline blue eyes have lit a flame
Exploding in the sky, illuminating why you’ll forever be original

I stand with intentions clear
The stars and sun unite as one, trust devoid of fear
Don’t you cry; please know everything will be all right
Oh, angel I’ll kill the darkness and guide you to the light

And I won’t let this pain wash away the unparalleled for eternity
You have set me in a trance, an otherworldly daze (a lasting silhouette)
The blackened clouds divide to keep you safe
I’ll sacrifice it all, illuminating why you’ll forever be original

Look behind the light years that you seek
Beyond deceit, beyond the lies crippling your beliefs
A warm embrace of your identity
When the night grows cold from the whirlwind deep inside
When the summit’s scaled, and vanquished are the testing tides
I’m here

And you, you mean the world to me
I hope someday, you will see in my eyes, anchored into love that never dies
You make me feel alive in search of something so divine
I hope you feel the same


The light years are referring to having to look across the world for something that's right in front of her, and the "summit's scaled" part is a play on words referring to one of her favorite bands, Scale the Summit. The song in general has a lot of Opeth-esque acoustic parts, and an overall atmosphere similar to Dream Theater's "The Bigger Picture". Let me know your thoughts/suggestions, and thanks for reading!
Last edited by EvilorDivine68 at Nov 21, 2017,
#3
Hey man, I took into consideration the wordiness of it, and after rereading it, I tend to agree. I changed it up a little bit:

I know, you feel defeated
Enveloped in a wall of tears, wondering what’s real
I know, I’ve been there too
Though what only existed in reveries evolved in truth

And I won’t let this pain wash away the unparalleled for eternity
You have set me in a trance, an otherworldly daze
Your crystalline blue eyes have lit a flame
Exploding in the sky, illuminating why you’ll forever be original

I stand with intentions clear
Whatever you need to lift your soul, trust devoid of fear
Don’t you cry; please know everything will be all right
Oh, angel I’ll kill the darkness and guide you to the light

And I won’t let this pain wash away the unparalleled for eternity
You have set me in a trance, an otherworldly daze (a lasting silhouette)
The blackened clouds divide to keep you safe
I’ll sacrifice it all, illuminating why you’ll forever be original

Love close by, euphoric high, a touch of warm embrace
Beyond deceit, beyond the lies shifting your beliefs
Welcome to relief
When the night grows cold from the whirlwind that is life
When the summit’s scaled, and vanquished are the testing tides
I’m here

And you, you mean the world to me
I hope someday, you will see in my eyes, anchored into love that never dies
You make me feel alive, for who you are remains divine
I’ll bide my time and wait
Last edited by EvilorDivine68 at Jun 22, 2015,