#1
sitting at a lifeless dawn
a shape of despair
how did i end up here
again

bleed myself dry grasping at straws of relief
an empty man whose joy is found in ephemeral self disillusion
oh to feel my destruction
each fleeting moment
withdrawing years to come

sitting at a lifeless dawn
a shape of despair
why have i failed myself
again

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havent written anything in ages, came up with this just now on this delightful sleepless morning. pls crit, c4c and such
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On the come up we were listening to Grateful Dead and the music started passing through my bowel and out my arsehole as this violet stream of light. I shat music. It was beautiful.
#2
try taking the second stanza and using it to elaborate on the theme?/image (lifeless dawn) that is expressed in the first and last stanzas

that's all the advice i can really give
Last edited by Dregen at Jul 2, 2015,