#1
I wish I never said anything
To you, who made it so hard
But without knowing it.
The blanket falls and covers me
another falls to cover you
Mine is holed, but yours keeps you warm
I still miss her
Every day I miss her
You are the only thing I've felt the same around
But I know we can't be like that

Poison touches me now as my hatred dies
My body is beating faster
The world oscillates around me
Dancing
Fleeing
Falling
My previous thoughts reconvene
Backward, inverse, yet fluid
Until a screaming agony is pulled

Tired movements force my bad feelings to hide
Indications of something stronger
Never wanting to fall from view
Sirens of my beloved sister
White, gold and blue
Never will I tire of them
You are my body
You are my mind
You are my life


I love you.
A poem.
Quote by yoman297
no girl, movember isnt for you. shave your stache pls

I can out-bore you any day
#2
Song definitely needs a rewrite.
1. Story is ambiguous in what it is about.
2. No rhyme (rhyme is the magic)
3. No chorus or refrain. Just verse after verse
4. Song structure inconsistencies. Meter/stress is not consistent throughout each verse.
5. Title?
#3
Quote by travisgrimes
Song definitely needs a rewrite.
1. Story is ambiguous in what it is about.
2. No rhyme (rhyme is the magic)
3. No chorus or refrain. Just verse after verse
4. Song structure inconsistencies. Meter/stress is not consistent throughout each verse.
5. Title?

1. Doesn't need to be literal
2. Never heard of free verse?
3. So? Many songs have verse only, it's called strophic structure.
4. Yet again, free verse.
5. Anima, the thread title, Latin for life, breath, soul.

Just saying, there's more than one way to skin a cat (pardon the clichéd idiom).
A poem.
Quote by yoman297
no girl, movember isnt for you. shave your stache pls

I can out-bore you any day
Last edited by Pastafarian96 at Jul 20, 2015,