#1
I haven't tried to write a song in a year, so I don't know if this is good or not. It's supposed to be a bluesy rock song like something Royal Blood would make.


Out Of My Hair

Does it look like I care?
All you do is try to bring me down
So you can shut your mouth
'Cause I don't listen to a single thing you say
You're getting on my nerves
I thought I made myself quite clear
I don't want you around
So don't make me repeat myself again

(Chorus)
I'm a peacock and you gotta let me fly
I can do just fine all by myself
You're driving me insane!
I just want you out of my hair

I know you want to help
But you just get in my way
It's time to help yourself
'Cause I know that I can handle this shit, man
You need to get a life
One that does not involve me
My patience has run out
Trust me, that's not something you wanna see

(Chorus)
(Wonky guitar solo)
(Chorus x2)
I just want you out of my
I just want you out of my
I just want you out of my hair
#2
Okay this is a bit generic, its ego mainstream teenage stuff, i think you can do better.
Why not try to express that in a less simplistic and literal way?
#3
Quote by Poetofaman
Okay this is a bit generic, its ego mainstream teenage stuff, i think you can do better.
Why not try to express that in a less simplistic and literal way?

I had a feeling that it was generic, but I care more about riffs and the melody of the vocals and they sound really great in this song. How do you think I can improve the lyrics?