#1
Hey guys!

This is a rock song I wrote today. It's called "Insatious" (Insatiable). It's still very raw, I wrote it and recorded it in a few hours. If you like it and can provide me suggestions or advice, I'm happy to re-record it!

Links:

Youtube: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=d1BvqIuxoiM
Soundcloud: https://soundcloud.com/mike-yulin-zhang/insatious

Lyrics:

Dream, here we go again
It’s so dark in here, I can’t see the light.
I hear a sound and it’s from afar. In the sky, above the clouds.
All these words, running back in my head, and I can’t stop it now!

Chorus:

Insatious, my desire.
For life, for love.
Insatious, my faith.
For you, for me.
Insatious, my soul,
forever, in this realm.
Insatious, my soul.
I’ll mark it with fire.

One more time, here we go again. I feel u inside me now!
The pain inside is killing me, and I can’t make it stop.
Blood of fire dripping from my veins, burning along my path.
I wish if this could end right here, but I can’t make you stop.
#2
Nice, reminds of Nirvana for some reason, it has a grungy vibe to the whole song! Great music but vocals are not to my taste but that is just my opinion I think the song has some catchy elements to it but feel its missing some drive! I think some distortion in parts and a few more effects will give the song more of an edge

Good work though dude Please crit me here: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=33638716#post33638716
#3
Quote by heaven086
Nice, reminds of Nirvana for some reason, it has a grungy vibe to the whole song! Great music but vocals are not to my taste but that is just my opinion I think the song has some catchy elements to it but feel its missing some drive! I think some distortion in parts and a few more effects will give the song more of an edge

Good work though dude Please crit me here: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=33638716#post33638716


Thank you! I'm pretty new to recordings, and this is the first song I recorded with pure clean guitar.

I will try to incorporate more effects into my recordings in the future.