#1
Watch the rain as it falls up
As I'm falling down
See the world turn counter-clockwise
As I'm spinning around
Put your hand on my heart
Put my heart in your hands
Watch the rain as it falls up
As I'm falling down

Tonight's another sleepless night
Only me and the streetlights awake
Do you feel me think of you?
I depend on every breath you take
It's you; you're the beat of my heart
You're the light in my eyes
Brighter than the summer skies
You're the air in my lungs
You're the answer I'm searching for

Come with me, let's watch the wind
And we'll watch the sun falling down
Watch the sun as it falls down


Let's walk without moving
Converse without speaking
Emotions are running
Our eyes do the talking

Who am I? who are we?
Braided, entwined
Betwitched, transfixed
When two become one,
All turns to nothing

Come with me, let's watch the wind
And we'll watch the sun falling down
Watch the sun as it falls down
Come with me, let's watch the wind
And we'll watch the sun falling down
Watch the sun as it falls down


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=28KsKNnKD_o
#3
Quote by Jessicarrgh17
Beautiful! Very poetic! Would like to hear it

Thank you!

You can hear it; I posted the YouTube video in the original comment
#4
I'm not a huge fan of this, but then I think that might be more taste than anything else - it has quite a 'pop' feel to it (which isn't a bad thing).

The rain falling up works in a whimsical way, but the effect is dampened by using fall more correctly in the second line. The rhyming scheme seems a bit confused - rhyming itself is not a bad thing and there's no real consistency here. Skies/Eyes is very clichéd. This works as a pop song, but I don't think there's a message particularly - it's a love song that stays quite generic.

Sorry this is fairly negative - it is only my opinion and the most important thing is to keep writing and creating, it is for you, not for other people.
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#5
Quote by Herr Rararr
I'm not a huge fan of this, but then I think that might be more taste than anything else - it has quite a 'pop' feel to it (which isn't a bad thing).

The rain falling up works in a whimsical way, but the effect is dampened by using fall more correctly in the second line. The rhyming scheme seems a bit confused - rhyming itself is not a bad thing and there's no real consistency here. Skies/Eyes is very clichéd. This works as a pop song, but I don't think there's a message particularly - it's a love song that stays quite generic.

Sorry this is fairly negative - it is only my opinion and the most important thing is to keep writing and creating, it is for you, not for other people.
Thanks for your feedback!