#1
This is a big swing jazz band Sinatra type song about a friend of mine, who had a...."discolouration" down there for 2 years.

VERSE
I've got this feeling
Deep inside
A little tingle
That I can't deny
A burning desire
I've never felt before
And it feels like fire baby
And it's really sore

CHORUS
But it's probably nothing
Don't need no doctor today
It's probably nothing
In a day or two it'll go away
It's probably nothing
That's what the Doc will say
It's probably nothing
Don't need no doctor today

BRIDGE
You won't forget me baby
That's for sure
This loves eternal
Just like these weeping sores
I'll keep you up all night
Itching and a-scratching away
Maybe you could take a look
And tell me it's ok

CHORUS
But it's probably nothing
Don't need no doctor today
It's probably nothing
In a day or two it'll go away
It's probably nothing
Is not what google says
It's probably nothing
In a day or two it'll go away

VERSE
I've got this feeling
Down below
A fizzy tingle
An unhealthy glow
The stench is getting worse
Starting to flake
I'm going to end it all
If I've caught the AIDS

CHORUS
But it's probably nothing
Don't need no doctor today
It's probably nothing
In a day or two it'll go away
It's probably nothing
Is not what google says
It's probably nothing
And it's definetly not AIDS
#2
VERSE
I've got this feeling
Deep inside
A little tingle
That I can't deny
A burning desire
I've never felt before
And it feels like fire baby
And it's really sore I'd rephrase this line, something more clever and interesting?

CHORUS
But it's probably nothing
Don't need no doctor today "Don't need no doc today" flows better, to my ear. I'd change each repetition of this too
It's probably nothing
In a day or two it'll go away
It's probably nothing
That's what the Doc will say awkward line, read it all out loud and see what you think
It's probably nothing
Don't need no doctor today

BRIDGE
You won't forget me baby
That's for sure
This loves eternal
Just like these weeping sores similar to a rephrase in the first verse, I think it could be funnier to be less obvious here. Still make your point, but less gush. You know, subtlety and build up?
I'll keep you up all night
Itching and a-scratching away
Maybe you could take a look
And tell me it's ok rephrase?

CHORUS
But it's probably nothing
Don't need no doctor today
It's probably nothing
In a day or two it'll go away
It's probably nothing
Is not what google says
It's probably nothing
In a day or two it'll go away

VERSE
I've got this feeling
Down below
A fizzy tingle
An unhealthy glow
The stench is getting worse
Starting to flake
I'm going to end it all
If I've caught the AIDS same issue as above here starting at 'stench' I'd say. But hey, go for whatever humour you want. "the" aids?

CHORUS
But it's probably nothing
Don't need no doctor today
It's probably nothing
In a day or two it'll go away
It's probably nothing
Is not what google says
It's probably nothing
And it's definetly not AIDS

I'd suggest some polish. Sounds like you're having fun, either way keep it up
To see a World in a Grain of Sand
And a Heaven in a Wild Flower
Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand
And Eternity in an hour
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