After the first bass section your timing was sloppy and the same thing after the second bass section. Not entirely bad, but you should focus on the timing more. Pretty rough distortion too. You may want to reduce that.

I've heard a lot worse records than this. The sloppiness may not be heard live, but on a precise record like this, it is easily heard.
I also was too lazy to add the semi clean pre chorus bit.

What do you exactly mean by sloppy timing? My playing sounds in synch with the bass.
Or do you mean it's not as polished.
I hope this makes sense lol