Sounds rather Floyd-ian. The timing could be tighter at times, but otherwise sounds pretty cool. Some nice lead guitar in there. I worked with a guy that joked that he was tripolar. Perhaps I shouldn't joke about it, I've known people with some pretty serious mental issues. Perhaps you could review my music at this link:

The singing seems to start off very much Floyd-ian. It can always be tighter... I develop and record these songs within a day or so... then move on. My composition is my practice, but without much practice (if you know what I mean).