#1
Forgive Me

I want it to be true
I pray and want to believe

but it has not been my experience
or how it's worked out for me


Your father would never hurt you
in a moment when you are weak

leave a broken heart and empty arms
and time heals everything


I want it to be true
I pray and want to believe

but it has not been my experience
or how it's worked out for me


The truth will set you free
and in time will be revealed

what goes around comes around
and honesty will prevail


I want it to be true
I pray and want to believe

but it has not been my experience
or how it's worked out for me


I need it to be true
if it ever turns out to be

forgive them for their wrongs
for my doubt forgive me
#3
Thank you. My first posts, really first time anyone has read it but me. All feedback is greatly appreciated. Take care.
#4
I really enjoyed the refrain. Very well phrased, very economical. However, the words 'everything' and 'prevail' just seem out of place and a little clunky to me, when read out loud. They just don't go as well together as 'believe' and 'me', and 'be' and 'me'. Maybe could sound better if sung to offset that a little. Otherwise, I liked this. Good work.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1695429
Last edited by akack at Feb 4, 2016,
#5
Thanks so much for the reply. I appreciate the comments on 'everything' and 'prevail', I will take another look at that. The conversion of lyrics to music is a new process for me. How to write more 'singable' lyrics I hope will be part of my learning curve. Awesome! Thanks again!