#1
No 5

Sitting by the shoreline
nothing but a pastime
Thoughts about a lady
with powers kinda shady

They tell me that you never existed
A symbol was all it was
They tell me how my mind was twisted
by the fools that are none of us

Dabbling with that Reason
in this early season
pictures of a landscape
from a bitter mistake

They tell me that you never existed
and a symbol was all it was
They tell me that my mind was twisted
greeting fools like they're all of us

Demo: No 5
#2
I do like the rhyme scheme of this: AABA ABAB. That was quite nice.

It seems to me be a bit shorter than I was expecting, but that is not meant to be a negative connotation

The imagery messages with all this was nice, but I admit I am confused with context. Is it schizophrenia? Is it insanity? Is it creativity?

-Sharky
#3
Hey just checking out your track, I'm not a real stickler for lyrics so I don't have much to say there. However I do dig the chillness of the track. You remind me of Lenny Kravitz so I guess that is a pretty big compliment for you. Your voice is nice and soothing and you can sing very well. I like this song.