#1
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kjIxeng_Fg0


check out my other videos if you like this!


lyrics:

The stars beyond the planets
Trapped in their own light
Wishing they were brighter
They have lost their sight
What they could have been
Is something far beyond
Floating in the vaccuum
Not making a sound

I don't sleep I stay awake
I'm up all night, up all night
You're on my mind, on my mind

I don't want to say goodbye
I will try, I will try to
Get it right, get it right

Wandering the surface
No destination in my mind
Not lost but forgotten
Feels like I'm going blind
Wish I could have seen it
The end of everyone I knew
If no one had a purpose
Why do I still think of you

I don't sleep I stay awake
I'm up all night, up all night
You're on my mind, on my mind

I don't want to say goodbye
I will try, I will try to
Get it right, get it right
#2
Guitar throughout is great, I was intrigued. Vocals are solid too—nice voice, interesting lyrics. Performance is well executed, do you gig at all? I liked the outro, drifts off nicely. Good songwriting.

What are you running your mic and guitar into? Doesn’t sound too bad, just some hiss/noise that’s a bit distracting (or maybe camera/phone audio is in the mix?). Not a big deal though, song and performance make up for it. Maybe vocal volume up or guitar volume down a bit.

Nice one, I'll have to check out your other songs.
#3
Thank you!!! Yeah my equipment is not the greatest right now. I run my mic into a pre-amp, which then runs into a guitar amp. The microphone itself isn't very high quality either, and then yeah I am just using my phone to record it. I'm working on getting better, more professional equipment to make everything sound better.


I have gigged a bit in the past, but am trying to do more. Starting next week I will be playing at some open mics and hopefully get people interested to possibly have me play shows.