#2
Nice work. You have good picking hand mainly in the fact that you use your wrist to pick and not so much your arm. That's good.

However, your shoulder is a little too raised, which suggests that you still have some tension in your right arm and shoulder. Or maybe it's just the angle from the camera, hard to tell.

Most noticeable I think is your sweep - your sweep at 0:41 sounds more like strumming a group of notes. You wanna make sure it's single note.

Sweep at 0:45, you should slow down and make sure you in time with the sweep, the length of the note and the force of each note should be consistent. I know it's difficult because you sweep down toward those thicker strings which have different tension. But that's why it's essential to play it slow and be patient so that your hand can adjust to the nuances

Keep it up