#1
Not sure if a poem or a short story, but i'm posting it here nonetheless
If it is deemed a story feel free to lock this thread or move it or something

I remember the days we were ruined
Minds lost in our own ways
The one who ends and the one who forgets
Dead and Beyond
You used to bring me back when Dead took over
I never could dispatch Beyond
One day Dead took me over
But the pretty pretty light sounds drove him back
Beyond was unhappy at this... Or was it you?
Beyond tried to take you away... Or was it you?
You came back, I don't think beyond liked that
I don't think beyond liked that at all

Forward some days and you are missing
I don't know if beyond did anything
After a while your echoes reach me
Echoes I did not know of
Echoes that make me angry
I hide them
It doesn't really matter anyway
I'm still nothing without you
I search some more
Another echo
A living one
A loving one
This echo speaks back
The others he does not know I've seen
It still doesn't matter, they can't be real

You finally return
Beyond is gone
Knowing this, Dead surrenders to eternity
I feel so strong, you are safe
But we only get a little time before the echo is all I have again
I will wait

You are finally free
We are finally free... I think

Potential for an ending
I'm terrified, Beyond and Dead may return
I don't want them to return
I can't let them return
But I tell the living echo I have heard the other echoes
The echo shuns me and tries to take you away forever
You still care
You don't leave
You won't leave
We are safe again

We have to hold on, please we must
I know I said we should pause
But I'm not sure I want to
Please be there at the end
It'll make us stronger
It will
It will
It will
...
Won't it?
A poem.
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#3
For me I think it ends really well at "I will wait", but the alternatives work as well.

I'm not used to reading in this style (I'm very much a songlyric person), but I enjoyed it and I feel like I got what you were aiming for.

In my own weird way I pictured Dead & Beyond as extra characters from Inside Out, in the way that you personify them.
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#5
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For me I think it ends really well at "I will wait", but the alternatives work as well.

I'm not used to reading in this style (I'm very much a songlyric person), but I enjoyed it and I feel like I got what you were aiming for.

In my own weird way I pictured Dead & Beyond as extra characters from Inside Out, in the way that you personify them.

That is actually the vibe I was trying to give off, glad to see it worked
A poem.
Quote by yoman297
no girl, movember isnt for you. shave your stache pls

I can out-bore you any day