#1
Flag Hypnosis

Berating
Mistaking insult to insult
Got freedom to burn
Along with dissension
Holy
Patriotism to godliness
Pray to your flag
Worship the cloth

It can't offer salvation
You piss on it

Damn your flag
Insane your calling
Damn your flag
Backwards mindset
Damn your flag
America rampant

Believing
And bleeding, no reason
Got people to burn
And engrave it on skin
Wear it
Freedom is buzzing
You wear it
Your pride is worthless

It ain't your salvation
You piss on it

Damn your flag
Insane your calling
Damn your flag
Backwards mindset
Damn your flag
America rampant

Damn your flag
Insane your calling
Damn your flag
Backwards mindset
Damn your flag
America rampant

You're all talk
Your cloth is
Something to choke on
A license to kill
Do what you want
In the name of a cloth

Damn your flag
Insane your calling
Damn your flag
Backwards mindset
Damn your flag
America rampant

Damn your flag
Insane your calling
Damn your flag
Backwards mindset
Damn your flag
America rampant
Guitar/Bass:
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Amps/FX
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#2
A very charged piece, I can feel the frustration and emotion behind it.

First observation is how many times the chorus is used - do you want that repeated 5 times? I do love the confused syntax, 'insane your calling' has a really nice jarring sense to it.

'It ain't your salvation / Piss on it' - doesn't quite fit the feel of the rest, the use of 'ain't' seems a little out of place, whilst 'piss on it' doesn't keep with the language being used elsewhere - maybe 'desecrate'?

Finally the word 'cloth' is overused in the last verse - especially after being referenced in the first. I understand the point you're making, however it could be better to diversify.

For me the most powerful verse is the first, especially 'mistaking insult to insult / got freedom to burn' , it's well written and concise. Overall this is a good piece, you know what you want to say and you're communicating it, so it is doing exactly what it should.
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#3
Thanks!

This was written in a punk tone, and with that in mind, some of the approach fit better, but, yeah, the bridge might need tweaking.
Guitar/Bass:
Schecter: Damien 6/Stilletto Extreme 5, Squier: Bullet HSS*, Washburn RX10*/WG-587, Agile Septor 727
*mods

Amps/FX
Peavey: Vypyr 30/Max 112 (200W), ISP: Decimator

Quote by dannyalcatraz
Understood- I waste money on amps*, too.

justinguitar.com is the answer