This is one of my favorite songs to listen to and sing. I also like singing Zephyr Song by RHCP.

Your voice sounds great in most of this. I think you have some potential for sure. There are a couple parts where you were just SLIGHTLY out of key and maybe your volume or sustain was a little lacking. But those are the things that every great singer has had to work on.

You're probably already aware of this, but wearing some good headphones (noise cancelling maybe) and turning up the volume on your mic real loud is the best way to practice because you can only hear your voice through the headphones. And as we all know, our voices sound slightly different when we hear them recorded vs what we hear through our ears and within our head.

So this makes it really obvious where your voice is lacking a bit.

Anyway, great work man!