#1
strange edges
new illusions
sad faces
high tides

collusion rolls your head into your eyeballs
underhand the lipstick tans your words
the truth burns the roof of your mouth
and twists bridges, contorts memories

strange edges, new illusions
hot gossip, contusions

it trickles down your chest and tickles your ribs
and stains what it was meant to instead show off
I've fallen for you before, and in your hands found myself squished
I've been drawn into dances before, and lived

the colouration of your lips, your teeth
the narrow slits in your eyes
down the length of your thighs, I swore
to honour, obey and abide

strange edges, new illusions
sad faces
high tides

the colouration of your lips, your teeth
the narrow slits in your eyes
down the length of your thighs, I swore
to honour, obey and abide

in my bed, wretched lair
sand paper hair, ropes of despair
in my bed, soliloquy
the duvet rumbles with your contempt

strange edges
new illusions
blue gossip
and black contusions
#2
I like the overall theme's presentation. However...

I've fallen for you before, and in your hands found myself squished

Something about the phrasing, particularly "squished" seems abrupt.

While
the duvet rumbles with your contempt

is a fantastic line.

Really enjoy the piece.
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#3
Great lyrics Jammy, is this your hobby?

"the colouration of your lips, your teeth
the narrow slits in your eyes
down the length of your thighs, I swore
to honour, obey and abide"

nice lines
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