#1
i can hear her footsteps down the hall
the floorboards tremble in pain
now they're echoing past my door
and i'm still rattling chains

her heart's blind
she's manipulated
by what she can't see

black holes in his eyes
there's no more room
for her make believe
ESAD
Last edited by 5wFisher at Oct 1, 2016,
#2
I thought this was from the perspective of a ghost hearing someone in their house because of the chain rattling line and thought, "Oh dude, cool."

Then the rest was kind of high-school notebook level scribble. Great start, flesh it out. Sit on it a day or two before posting.
OBEY THE MIGHTY SHITKICKER