#3
I like your melodies but it sounds like you need to separate the frequencies to make each instrument stand out more clearly. The drums could be a little louder. Some parts sound like a lot of hissing in them, I don't know if it's just the way the instrument sounds or if it's a technical issue (I think it might be the hi-hat or ride cymbal on the drums).

But overall it's pretty good composition wise, I just think the quality could be a bit better, experiment with some EQing (though that is a never ending learning process). It's all about your style though.