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I would appreciate any critique or feedback that could be offered. Thank you!

As I lay dying
As I lay crying
The sea rushes by
I'm swept under the tide

As I stand bleeding
As I drop reeling
Back from the wave
Falling into this grave
__________________

Somebody help me
Somebody save me
Anyone at all

Somebody stop them
Don't just keep walking
Watching me crawl

___________________

As I sit breathless
As I brood restless
Pacing in place
Watching the chase

As I take myself
As I hate myself
But you can't relate
And I can't escape
__________________

Somebody help me
Somebody save me
Anyone at all

Somebody stop them
Don't just keep walking
Watching me crawl

___________________

Brushing shoulders with the cold
Pushed until I fold
Quickly growing old
With no one to help me

Slipping on the ice
Look me in the eyes
Break the silence
If you can help me

____________________

Help Me
Save Me
Anyone
Stop them
My friend
Before I'm gone

Help Me
Save Me
Anyone
Stop them
My friend
Before I'm gone
Weast? What kind of compass are you reading lad?