#2
You have a nice hook here. Cool melodies and riifs. But the moment from 2 52 - 3 30 if far too long in my oppinion.
Also the same time period when you have long pauses you can hear sometims that you have touched guitar or smth (3 18 left guitar track) . I would delete place on guitar track where you don't play.

C4C?

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