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Bar 139 - 157 is what jumps out at me most. Same with Bar 175. Add some more percussion tension to that section too (like 16th note hi hat instead of 8th) and that'd be something to keep.

Otherwise, in general, this kind of ''groovy'' death metal is a liiiittle stale, although I personally appreciate that it's almost the same harmonic progression as the verse riff to Obscura's Vortex Omnivium.
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