Interesting stuff man! Guitars sound pretty spot on, maybe a little high in the mix for this sort of music that relies heavily on the listener hearing all the words to get the comedy across? Your voice is great, lots of potential there so looking forward to hearing other stuff from you. Liked the short bass descending line between chorus and verse. I think overall just make sure every word is absolutely clear in the vox, even if that means mixing other things down a little? Cool stuff, the video adds so much as well.

Hopefully you can have a listen to my music: