I think it's a bit too energetic for sludge. Roll back the BPM about 20 beats across the board, add some an overhead melodic element to some of the more simple riffs (like Bar 51) and you'd have a very solid song.

Minor thing but the solo segment at 152 - 153 feels slightly dissonant, would recommend rethinking which notes/pattern to use there. But yeah, still good.

Care to listen to mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/redirect/post?p=34346704

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