#1
Good morning/evening/night everybody. My first track here. Nothing spectacular but I hope that's listenable. 
 Influenced mainly by Decapitated and Meshuggah. 
Attachments:
Humans Ashes.gp5
#2
That's a really confusing piece of music.

I'm not sure if I'd say it's 'bad' but I wouldn't say it's a song so much as a pool of ideas put together. The whole triplet timing thing throws me off as well. bar 13 is an odd one too. If bar 13 only played once then you had the repetitions in place at bar 14, cut down on the number of them (from 7 to 3) then it'd be a bit less jarring.

I like bar 22 specifically cuz it sounds like Car Bomb.

Closed high hats don't ever work with loud distorted guitars and metal drum rhythms.

Really, all I can say is that for a first track? Mine was way worse, so don't worry about that. Just learn a bit about song structures, listen to as many different things as possible and gather as much music together that makes you feel things emotionally.

Also, don't repeat things so much.

Some recs based on the sound you've got going on in your piece:



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