#1
Thoughts? Criticisms?


Stealing Salvation

Take a pill and run a bath
Watch your life circle the drain
Hide the kill and have a laugh
Don't be late to catch your train

Eat the words you'd never say
But don't forget the lies you tell
It's so absurd this time of day
Just hand over your soul to sell

They'd lock you up for less than this
They'll take you in and tear you down
Steal salvation before the sin
You'd murder again if the chance came around

How can we believe?
How can we believe?
Tell me who I should be
How can we believe?

Thread the needle and sip your wine
Tell me again just what to do
Stitch together the ends of time
Remember life won't wait for you

They'd lock you up for less than this
They'll take you in and tear you down
Steal salvation before the sin
You'd murder again if the chance came around

How can we believe?
How can we believe?
Tell me what I should see
How can I believe?
#2
It's cool!

Quote by Mainer
Take a pill and run a bath
Watch your life circle the drain
Hide the kill and have a laugh
Don't be late to catch your train

Eat the words you'd never say
But don't forget the lies you tell
It's so absurd this time of day
Just hand over your soul to sell


My only concern is that this final line is one syllable to many and it just knocks an otherwise solid rhythm off for a second.