#1
A hard day turned worse
My fate cursed
Sunburned
A fight for survival

A cleansing shower
A desperate hour
My own cowardice
No climax

I'm totally screwed
What made me choose
Pathetic excuses
Becoming schizophrenic

A path I tred upon
Plied with bourbon
Interstate swerving
What is life

Closing desperate eyes
Drifting by
Until realizing
My own selfishness
ESAD
#2
This all but begs the question of what the central conflict that instigates this entire piece. Without that grounding element, this is a lot of feeling without giving the context (and by extension, gravitas). Cheers.
I am a fake mountain.
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