#1
I make one man band music.

I record with a Rock Band mic. 

I don't know how to sing. 

I just have fun and whatever happens happens. This is my best song yet, it's a thing. I'd really like to know what peeps think and I will critique what you ask in return! 

The ending of track is kind of boring, so focus more on the song part then the overly long guitar outro.
https://soundcloud.com/poptarthero/magnus-bridge 
Last edited by PoptartHero at Jun 1, 2017,
#2
Barry,
thanks for listening to my song. Im glad the humor is apparent! I listened to few of your songs on this album. I like your musical sensibilities. Your voice fits your clever lyrics and quirky musicianship. very indie feeling. I could listen to this stuff all day. I liked the ending of this song, It was gentle exit. Im going to follow u. You kind of remind me of a lo-if Modest Mouse. Nice work.

P.S. I liked "fairly odd pancreas" too.
#3
Oh wow, thank you for much for listening to more and commenting! I just like to have fun and make everything sound like...me. Nice to see someone enjoyed it! I will listen to more-a-your tracks to! 
#4
I like the vocals they're well mixed and you sound good, the lyrics are delivered well and with an interesting vocal melody. The drums could be a tad louder in the mix otherwise they sound good. What happens at 2:15 and beyond is pretty awesome but there are a few clipping issues from 3:40- 4:00. The guitar tone is really good and the playing is too. Every song needs a solo or 5 though.....jk, but anywhere from 2:15 till the end could of had one though and that would of been cool. Give me the audio file and ill put one in for you . Anyway good song and keep on creating.
#5
Thanks for the comment! Maybe so, I like loud drums but I focus the most on my guitar parts and I still have a lot to learn about mixing, sometimes the drums (which since I use one mic are just mono) overpower everything if they're too loud. My Rock Band mic doesn't like clean trembly guitars! The single note stuff is fine but once I play loud chords it clips, an annoying issue I have with 12-string songs... 

Ha ha, I am a big fan of solos but I thought the noise and single guitar track where enough to express the scene or character sketch of this song. I don't play solos on a lot of my tracks because I don't feel many of them require one. But I do love a well played lead. You might want to see the second half of "Time For Tims" to see what I can do. It's not much...I'm a simple player really. 
https://soundcloud.com/poptarthero/time-for-tims 
Last edited by PoptartHero at May 31, 2017,
#7
Hey man!
Thanks for commeting to my song.

I normaly don't listen to this kind of music but I think you ve go smth there but I didn't like two things.

I have a feeling to most of the time you are almost talking and not singing
I also think that vocals in the track are too loud comparing to the mix.

Other than that!
Everything is good  
#8
Thanks for listening, yes I know what you mean. I'm really no singer, nor vocal melody composer...a lot of my songs are like that ha ha, working on it. Mixing as well, first I was embarrassed of my voice and I hid the vocals, now I'm like...how do I do this...I make songs fast so I slowly learn these these. 
#9
Thanks for commenting!

Very nice guitar sound and playing. Vocals are not bad but sometimes it sounds like you're trying to sing below your range. Maybe try a higher key? Drums sound a bit thin and I felt the outro was too long, but overall I think it sounds good!
#10
Thanks for the feedback man, glad you liked it

You recorded this on a single rock band mic?! You've done a very good job with it.
I like the song, it's charming in it's simplistic plodding nature. Interesting lyrics too. 
You already mentioned the singing, it's not a 'singing' voice but I don't think that really matters too much with this kind of music. It's oddly suitable.
I agree that the ending is too long, I like the idea of it though. The guitar and backing sound effects could certainly be developed further. Listen to Syd Matters 'Obstacles' to hear a great example of this.

Keep playing!
#11
Thanks for the comments you two. 

Ya my singing is always a weak point, on goofy rock songs I work better because if anything I have a vocal character to get by on, but on these songs it's harder. I don't know how to correctly sing yet, I've only been doing it for real for 2 years. 

I've been using this Rock Band mic for various things for almost 8 years ha ha. It's so bad on drums but it's all I can do. Ya the end was giving me trouble so once I did a take without mistake I just left it. I would like to re-do it maybe but this was a one time thing I feel. I can't recapture this vibe.