#1
Music: https://soundcloud.com/somasumusic/sets/from-the-water


Lyrics:

  
Everybody (Loves You)

(Everybody loves you,
everybody cares) 
Nobody’s curfew
Release my strength
Everybody loves you 
Everybody cares
Think about the virtue
That eats your friends
Everybody loves you
Everybody cares
Don’t waste your time
Don’t waste… Your… Time
(no lack, no lack, no lack)
Running in the city, lately
You wish that the towers will beseech you greatly
I am all the things that made me
Cold ears are the lovers that won’t see you, baby
Is this my length
Is this my fence
(just like the reeeeest, yeah)
Nobody’s curfew
Release my strength
Yeah
Everybody loves you 
Everybody cares
Think about the virtue
That eats your friends
Yeah
Everybody loves you
Everybody cares
Don’t lie to me
Don’t lie to me
Don’t lie to me
(don’t lie to me)
No way back, no way back
Is it truth… That you lack
I’m the fool… That wants you back
Yeah
Just a fool that wants you back
Is it truth that you fear, oooh?
Is it truth that you… Fear?
Nobody’s curfew
Release my strength
Yeah
Everybody loves you 
Everybody cares
Think about the virtue
That eats your friends
Yeah
Everybody loves you
Everybody cares
Don’t die for me
Don’t die for me
Don’t die for me
Oh oh wooh wooh oh wooh wooh oh
Everybody loves you
Everybody cares
Everybody loves you
Everybody cares
  
You Want Help

Tell me that you’re mine, babe
Tell them that you’re lying, babe
If all hell cries, will you sleep at night?
Tell them about your crimes, babe
Read between the lines, babe
Watch the signs
That’s right, don’t believe the lies
Wishing you were mine, babe
Don’t forget to switch the lights, babe
This is ours babe, I’m pure babe
Don’t run babe
I just want Hennessy 
This is my enemy oh so oh
You want help eh
You’re by yourself eh
(Eh that’s right eh that’s right eh that’s right) x 2
Don’t leave, it can’t be 
Crucify yourself for me 
I can’t even fool miss
Watch that step playing your new glitch
This feeling still making me do this
I want to help you get through this
Get through this, eh
Don’t love this time x3 
Every day I find
I’m alone this time x2 
Oh
Let this be your sky, go
And retrieve the night, tonight
You want help eh
You’re by yourself eh
(Eh that’s right eh that’s right eh that’s right) x 2
[Over dub]
You want help
Oh – oh… oh [so oh]
You want help
Oh – oh… oh [so oh]
Oh, oh
You want help
You want help

Permutation

I can’t save myself
You know I can’t contain myself
Travelling just to main my health
You think I don’t know myself, eh
And I know my length
So far I don’t need your help
So far I don’t want this mess
I can’t clean myself, eh
Sometimes I don’t need the balance
All the time I’m one with the malice
Save yourself
Know your blossom
Own your strength
Keep the autumn 
And I own the lines, it’s now summer time
Can’t stamp fear, need colder winder
And my wife’s here, she was never mine, ah
Don’t quite think she understands, ah
Let life play in overtime, now
I can’t save myself
You know I can’t contain myself
Travelling just to main my health
You think I don’t know myself, eh
And I know my length
So far I don’t need your help
So far I don’t want this mess
I can’t clean myself, eh
Do the crime
Do the crime, do the crime
Sniff the lines
Feel the signs, feel divine 
Be inclined
To do the time, do the time
No more lying
No more sighing, now
Let the time reveal its faith ~
Let the cowards wash their face ~
Kill the lies, watch them fade
Yah, yah
Still trying to find my faith
Yahweh
Don’t let me die in vain
Yeah, that way
I can’t save myself
You know I can’t contain myself
Travelling just to main my health
You think I don’t know myself, eh
And I know my length
So far I don’t need your help
So far I don’t want this mess
I can’t clean myself, eh
Every day is the same
I am now what I hate
What a time, what a time
Just let me be
Just let me be a saint
I’m trying to be awake, yeah
Still can’t reveal myself
No, no, no
Is this my own will?
No, no, no
Please don’t forget the still
Row, row, row
The days remain unreal (unreal, unreal)
I can’t save myself
You know I can’t contain myself
Travelling just to main my health
You think I don’t know myself, eh
And I know my length
So far I don’t need your help
So far I don’t want this mess…

Still

New girl, it’s been a while
No more swerving, no more crowds
I know that you’re sweating now
Close the curtains, cut the light – I
Always found the chad space ~
In the right place ~
I don’t own time, but I have days
Where the class clown runs sideways
Like
I am all the things you migrate 
I know the things you stagnate 
I wrote the book you narrate – ah
We will burn your house, mate
Just don’t forget the floodgates, yah
On this broken glass I lay
Run this block, I run this block, I
Let the spirit take my place
Watch this glock, just watch just glock, now x2
Guilty…
I know that your mind knows the real me
I know that your cries feel no pity
Open up your eyes, see the pretty… And the filthy [cool voice]
Ay
I put the keys in the boot
Don’t be the sin of your fruit
I am the things that you view – Ay! Yah!
You fear the heat of the blue
You know the street under you
I acquire the things that you lose (quiet)
On this broken glass I lay
Run this block, I run this block, I
Let the spirit take my place
Watch this glock, just watch just glock, now x2
I am an isle X3
Let the water bring it back x3
Aye! Aye! Yah!
On this broken glass I lay
Let the spirit take my place x2

Gabi

Don’t leave my side
It’s just you and I
I can’t… Believe my health
Don’t heal my pride
I just want to die
This time… I feel my strength
I don’t need your help
I don’t need the meds (No)
Now you see (ah, ah ah)
The length of grief (I, I)
Can’t stand the sight
Of broken minds
Redeem the pain for me
In dream, in dream oooh
Now I open up my eyes and see
Now I’ve sunken to a ground of leaves
Wish you knew the age of time I seek
Words of news become the ash of me
No surprise
No surprises
In this light I forget that
I was once just a reverend
Just not this time, just not this time
Please... Don’t pray for me
Please... Don’t let me be
You… Are the one for me
I just want to say ohhh
Now I open up my eyes and see
Now I’ve sunken to a ground of leaves
Wish you knew the age of time I seek
Words of news become the ash of me
   
Last edited by Bleed Away at Jun 14, 2017,
#2
Gauntlet time!

Everybody (Loves You)
I can't say I'm a fan of the chorus. A virtue eating friends could work if it carried any weight, and that's a recurring issue with the entire song. Airiness can be a good thing, but there's nothing nailing anything down here.

You Want Help
"If all hell cries, will you sleep at night?" There you go. Something interesting is being said there. Do more with that. Otherwise, it's more treading water with "babe." Help with what? Again, details.

Permutation
Do you mean "maintain my health?" Otherwise, more details. Focus more on telling a story than on making brief lines rhyme all the time. The most compelling bit here is this part, and the rest fades to obscurity:
Yah, yah
Still trying to find my faith
Yahweh
Don’t let me die in vain
Yeah, that way
I can’t save myself 

Still
And we have come to the end. This is easily the most fully-realized piece here, even with the cringe-worthy "Glock" bit. You set a scene far better here than in the other songs. The lines are longer, and the rhymes therefore don't need to come so quickly and nonsensically. Word economy can be a good thing, but it's clear you do yourself a favor with more flesh on the bone.

That sounds terribly negative, and for that I partially apologize. It happens. Keep working.
I am a fake mountain.