Nice intro and monologue/verse interesting lyrics but it works with what your trying to accomplish I wish the guitar had a little more meat on it (thicker) but maybe that's what you were going for. I'm finding it somewhat bland not a lot happening imo. The bass and drums sound good I like the lead that kicks in about 3:30
then theres a nice change afterwards that I'm digging. Overall I like what your trying to do I can appreciate it.  Lyrics have some meaning behind em that's cool .
Overall good work c4c? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1754420