Grovermans
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#3
it has to repeat that many times for the lyrics.

I just want to sleep forever.


Grovermans
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#5
i can't make it less repetetive.
the lyrics need to fit in.

I just want to sleep forever.


gutsman
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#6
you can try adding some varations at some points to make it more diverse
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#7
i guess, but i want to keep it simple
and just have one guitar
so it's really easy to record.

I just want to sleep forever.


guitarbreaker
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#8
Okay then make some varitions on the chords thats all.
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#9
I don't know if you can make it in a different format somehow, but I'd love to hear it(as I love the lyrics), but powertab's never worked for me.
lEcheloNl
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#11
Quote by Grovermans
it has to repeat that many times for the lyrics.

no it doesnt.
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Grovermans
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#12
...

yes.

it does.

i don't think you would know...

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PsychoFreak
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#13
Rofl guys, it is HIS song, you can't tell him what sounds right and not....
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My father took me to the bedroom
and told me not to tell
Grovermans
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#14
well they're not telling me what sounds right.

they're telling me that the lyrics
would fit in perfectly,
when they have no idea
how or where they fit in.

I just want to sleep forever.


gutsman
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#15
well next time post it with the lyrics in mp3 so that we CAN give usefull comments ey
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#16
i'd have to record it to do that,
and that's a helluva lot more work,
in case you didn't know that.

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Egrodyne
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#18
Not bad, i like it
possibly you could cut verse 2 in half,
this is a trate used to grap the attention back because...
they weren't expeting,
it as quick as the first time,
round

...god u have a werid way of writting things,
govermans
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#19
i can't cut the second verse in half.
i don't know what you guys don't understand about this,
but the lyrics need to fit in and they just fit in as it is.

I just want to sleep forever.


Egrodyne
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#20
i dont see why you cant split the stanza's up a bit....imagen each verse had 2 sections which were x 2 repeat, repective...

the first verse would have both sections....
..then chours
then half a verse
chours...that interlude....verse 3 which is the second half of your verse 2...then that outro..

....that would be pretty cool
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#21
it just doesn't work like that...

the verses were each written
to be almost exactly the same,
but with different subjects
and different ideas, but
the wording was the same.

so the verses have to be the same length
in order to get the right effect.

I just want to sleep forever.


Egrodyne
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#22
Quote by Grovermans
it just doesn't work like that...

the verses were each written
to be almost exactly the same,
but with different subjects
and different ideas, but
the wording was the same.

so the verses have to be the same length
in order to get the right effect.


just seems forumulated and clinched not to mention boring after the 3rd repeat.........
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#23
you mean "cliched" not "clinched" right?
cuz if you don't i have no clue wtf you're saying.

and most of my songs seem kinda boring
until i actually add the lyrics to them.
i write the lyrics first and then write music to them,
so basically, any music i write has to be repeated like that
unless it's an instrumental piece or there are no lyrics yet.

I just want to sleep forever.


Egrodyne
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#24
Quote by Grovermans
you mean "cliched" not "clinched" right?
cuz if you don't i have no clue wtf you're saying.

and most of my songs seem kinda boring
until i actually add the lyrics to them.
i write the lyrics first and then write music to them,
so basically, any music i write has to be repeated like that
unless it's an instrumental piece or there are no lyrics yet.


...So ur an emo bob dylan? interesting
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piratepirate
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#25
I'm going to basically agree with what most people said, except I'll take your side and say that the lyrics fit in the way they are, and with proper vocals, the monotony would be completely relieved.

The lead guitar also adds a nice touch.