hammett_slash89
The Mexicano Guitarist
Join date: Apr 2005
188 IQ
#1
my first time submitting something here.....please crit mine and ill crit yours if you leave a link..thanks
Attachments:
Desperation.zip
THRICE!!
gutsman
Registered User
Join date: Nov 2004
285 IQ
#3
that was just wacky... the consctruction was really weird and the solo (besides from having unlogical repeatings) felt like it had some notes of.

the last part had some potential though, keep trying and check out tabs from professional bands on guide lines to improve your song
Last edited by gutsman at Nov 8, 2005,
guitarbreaker
Aeolian Flight Modulation
Join date: May 2005
854 IQ
#4
A little strange try to stay in same scale more then it would sound better. Check out mine.Mine Midi anyone can listen to on the computer.
piratepirate
shiver me timbers
Join date: Jun 2005
153 IQ
#5
0.0 what the hell were you on when you wrote this?


It's possibly the most wreched thing I've ever had the misfortune of passing through my ears.

I think I'm going to cry ;.;
Philosopher1989
Proudly Psychotic
Join date: Jul 2004
229 IQ
#6
I always say, just because u can play alot of notes fast, it doesn't mean ur playing its good. everything was too disorganized and it didn't have the ability to carry a tune. maybe check mine, https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=278758
its real simple but somewhat catchy
hammett_slash89
The Mexicano Guitarist
Join date: Apr 2005
188 IQ
#9
ok...just so u all no it was meant to be retarded and weird
THRICE!!
Grovermans
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Join date: Jan 2004
2,846 IQ
#10
...

nice try.

it's still horrible.
there's a such thing as
organized chaos, and this
was NOT organized at all.
it was just complete chaos.

I just want to sleep forever.


hammett_slash89
The Mexicano Guitarist
Join date: Apr 2005
188 IQ
#11
that was the exact point of it...to have no point..if that made sense......me and my band wanted to something weird..were retarded like that
THRICE!!
Grovermans
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Join date: Jan 2004
2,846 IQ
#12
you can still be weird in a way
that sounds somewhat organized.
listen to a lot of hardcore stuff
and you'll see what i mean.

I just want to sleep forever.


hammett_slash89
The Mexicano Guitarist
Join date: Apr 2005
188 IQ
#13
i do listen to hardcore..but the point of the song was we WANTED it to be retarded and random
THRICE!!
Egrodyne
Registered User
Join date: Mar 2004
103 IQ
#15
Quote by hammett_slash89
i do listen to hardcore..but the point of the song was we WANTED it to be retarded and random


....Yeah ok fair enough, doesn't make up for the fact its ****e though does it
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flyingjew34
Opeth Afficianado
Join date: Oct 2005
583 IQ
#17
too random... sry
- FJ

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Mr. Mister
Join date: Aug 2005
610 IQ
#19
O.O

Dude and I thought the stuff I wrote was bad..but this is just....woah..

The repeats sound horrible, the riffs are just...out there, not in a good way...
How did you even make this? Did you just open up powertab and then start beating your keyboard? Sorry dude but this was AWFUL.

Better luck next time...