phpn00bf4life
Why give up?
Join date: Jul 2005
225 IQ
#1
Even though i've been lately into upbeat songs i really like this, it's a depressing song. I'll wait until the right girl deserves it or something. I played it on acoustic. Full crits are welcome (and wanted) I will return as possible, leave link please!


Legend:
/ = slide down
\ = slide up
h = hammer on
p = pull off
~ = let ring
. = bend up
, = bend down

Q = Quarter Notes
W = Whole Notes
H = Half Notes

 
    Q Q Q Q Q  Q Q Q Q Q Q  Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q H
e:||------------------------------------------||
B:||------------------------0-----0-----------||
G:||----0----------0----------0-----0---------||
D:||--4---4------2---2------------------4-----||
A:||5-------5\-3-------5-7------5-----3---5-7~||
E:||------------------------------------------||

    Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q H
e:||------------------------------------------||
B:||------------------------------------------||
G:||--------4-4-4-4---------2-2-2-------------||
D:||4-4-4-4-4-4-4-4-5-5-5-5-2-2-2~------------||
A:||5-5-5-5-2-2-2-2-5-5-5-5-2-2-2~------------||
E:||----------------3-3-3-3-0-0-0~------------||
Philosopher1989
Proudly Psychotic
Join date: Jul 2004
229 IQ
#2
The introduction riff is good, sounds like a riff i wrote a while ago, just more expanded. But the chord riff, i would suggest a progresstion that uses more minor chords if u want to make it sound depressing
phpn00bf4life
Why give up?
Join date: Jul 2005
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#4
Quote by Philosopher1989
The introduction riff is good, sounds like a riff i wrote a while ago, just more expanded. But the chord riff, i would suggest a progresstion that uses more minor chords if u want to make it sound depressing

Okay, i'm gonna throw out those stupid bar chords anyways, hit up some more minors.
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is that 2nd part supposed to be played with the first?

yes.
Egrodyne
Registered User
Join date: Mar 2004
103 IQ
#5
Quote by phpn00bf4life
Okay, i'm gonna throw out those stupid bar chords anyways, hit up some more minors.

yes.



...then its gonna sound awful with a B5 under a C Major........
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flyingjew34
Opeth Afficianado
Join date: Oct 2005
583 IQ
#6
the first part is great! might i suggest this for the chord part?:

                                   x2
||---------------------------------||
||-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-1-||
||-0-0-0-0-0-0-0-0-2-2-2-2-2-2-2-2-||
||-2-2-2-2-2-2-2-2-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-||
||-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-0-0-0-0-0-0-0-0-||
||---------------------------------||
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Lacquer_Head
Band
Join date: Oct 2004
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#8
sounds nice... i'm not too sure about that tri-tone ( the third fret a string to fourth fret d string) at the end of the intro, but maybe that's just me.
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Deluxe
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Join date: Dec 2004
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#9
The intro is similar to Joe Satriani's "I believe". Same notes and stuff, just a different order to them.

Like others here have said, the riff is kinda nice, but the chords thrown in at the end could use some work.


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EmeraldICE
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Join date: Mar 2005
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#10
I really like the riff, but like others have said, the chords need some work.
hthedinga
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Join date: Nov 2005
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#11
That reminds me of a song I wrote. Here's part of it:

The first half of the verse is all 8th notes. The second half of the verse is strummed to a rhythm similar to the chorus. The last chord of the verse isn't held out so that there's a break between verse and chorus. The chorus is strum to this rhythm: 1 & 2 &a e& 4 &a. Let me know what you think.


Verse
E----------------------------------------------------------
B-------------------------------0--------------------------
G---0---0----0---0---0---0---0---4-------------------------
D--5-5-5----5-5-5-5-5-5-5-5-4-4---5------------------------
A-7---7--7\3---3---5---5---5---5---------------------------
E----------------------------------------------------------

E----------------------------------------------------------
B------------------------------0---------------------------
G---0---0----0---0---0---0----0-0--------------------------
D--5-5-5----5-5-5-5-5-5-5-4--4---4-------------------------
A-7---7--7\3---3---5---5----5-----5------------------------
E----------------------------------------------------------

E----------------------------------------------------------
B----------------------3-----------------------------------
G-0-----0-----0-----0--0-----------------------------------
D-5-----5-----5-----4--4-----------------------------------
A-7-----3-----5-----5--5-----------------------------------
E----------------------------------------------------------

E----------------------------------------------------------
B--------------3----3----5---------------------------------
G-0-----0-----00----0----0---------------------------------
D-5-----5-----55----4----4---------------------------------
A-7-----3-----55----5----5---------------------------------
E----------------------------------------------------------

Chorus
E------------------/---------------------------------------
B-----7-77-55-5-55-/-----5-55-33-3-33----------------------
G------------------/---------------------------------------
D-5-5-5-55-55-5-55-/-5-5-5-55-55-5-55----------------------
A-7-7-7-77-77-7-77-/-3-3-3-33-33-3-33----------------------
E------------------/---------------------------------------

E------------------/---------------------------------------
B---3-33-3-33-3333-/-3-3-3-33355-5-55----------------------
G------------------/---------------------------------------
D-5-5-55-5-55-5555-/-4-4-4-44444-4-44----------------------
A-5-5-55-5-55-5555-/-5-5-5-55555-5-55----------------------
E------------------/---------------------------------------
Generalpwnt
Righteous
Join date: Aug 2005
1,727 IQ
#12
I hate all of you emo kids. Tabbing was created by god for something played so fast you can't diffrentiate the notes from each other. Go cut yourselves or what ever you emo kids do.
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Generalpwnt
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Join date: Aug 2005
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#13
I hate all of you emo kids. Tabbing was created by god for something played so fast you can't diffrentiate the notes from each other. Go cut yourselves or what ever you emo kids do.
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PjX71
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#14
^ what a dick..

nice to know you can use bb code well too (referring to sig)
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#16
Agreed with everyone else here.
Good first part, chords should be fixed a bit.
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Generalpwnt
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#17
How the hell am I supposed to know how to make my "sig" look right? I don't spend too much time working on that crap, it's all about the time spent on the guitar.
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