punk||conformed
phunker
Join date: Nov 2005
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#1
Hi, name's Mike. I've been working on this song for a while, and I'm happy with the feeling it gives off. It's not completed yet, as you can see. I've got a bridge-type riff in contruction, I'll try to get it up eventually. Basicly, I need help in bringing the parts together, in particular the verse to the chorus. Theres a large speed difference in the two, and they won't mold together, even though the verse riff is perfictly fitting to the melody.

W=Whole Notes
H=Half Nots
Q=Quortor Notes
8th=8th Notes

4/4

Intro
  W   W  Q Q Q W   Q Q Q W   Q Q Q W   H Q
E--------0-------------------0---------------------------------|
B-0~--1~---1-0-----------4~------4-----------------------------|
G-2~--2~-------2~--2---0-5~----5---4~--4/8---------------------|
D-2~--2~-------3~----0---5~--------5~--5/9---------------------|
A-2~--2~-------3~--------3~--------5~--5/9---------------------|
E-0~--0~-------1~------------------3~--3/7---------------------|

Verse
  Q 88 Q 88 Q 88 Q 88 Q 88 Q 88 Q 88 Q 8 Q
E--------------------------------------------------------------||
B--------------------------------------------------------------||
G--------------------------4---------3-------------------------||
D-1-xx-1-xx-1-xx-1-xx-5-xx-5-xx-4-xx-4-x-3---------------------||
A-1-xx-1-xx-1-xx-1-xx-5-xx-5-xx-4-xx-4-x-3---------------------||
E-0-xx-0-xx-0-xx-0-xx-3-xx-3-xx-2-xx-2-x-1---------------------||

Verse Fill 1
E------|
B------|
G------|
D-3/7--|
A-3/7--|
E-1/5--|

Chorus Rythm
E--------------------------------------------------------------|
B--------------------------------------------------------------|
G--------------------------------------------------------------|
D-1------3----/5\3---------------------------------------------| x4
A-1-x11--3-x7-/5\3---------------------------------------------|
E-0------1----/3\1---------------------------------------------|

Chorus Lead
  Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q Q
E-----------------------------------------------------------------|
B-----------------------------------------------------------------|
G-----------------------------------------------------------------|
D-----------------------------------------------------------------| x2
A-----7-----7---7-----7-----7---7-----7-----7---7-----7----7---7--|
E-5-5---5-5---5---4-4---4-4---4---6-6---6-6---6---7-7--7-7---7----|

Last edited by punk||conformed at Nov 11, 2005,
punk||conformed
phunker
Join date: Nov 2005
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#2
I read the FAQ, and know bumping is frowned upon, but really, 80 views and no replys? What did I do that deserves to be ignored?
punk||conformed
phunker
Join date: Nov 2005
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#3
How is that everyone else gets replies and critiques yet I just get 100 frickin veiws?
X Alkaline 3
Banned
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#4
Hmm .. it doesn't seem to really fit together at all. I think that's why you've gotten no replies .. I played it, and couldn't find any connection between one bar and the next.
punk||conformed
phunker
Join date: Nov 2005
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#5
Yeah, but the whole point of this thread was to try to and bring a connection to the bars, to get them to blend together. I needed some suggestions as to how I could mesh them togther to play out smoothly.
SilentDeftone
UG God
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#6
Your timing is strange unless you implied rests somewhere in there. Whole notes followed by 3 quarters, then another whole note? Odd.

-SD
eXZee
Lazy guitarist
Join date: Oct 2005
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#7
You should take out the extra notes in the powerchords, like..

e|---
B|---
G|---
D|4-
A|4-
E|2-
instead of..
e|---
B|---
G|3-
D|4-
A|4-
E|2-
and the 0-1-1 on E,A,D doesn't sound good.. to me.
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SilentDeftone
UG God
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#8
^ And why is that? The 3rd, which you suggest removing, adds definition to the chord. What you're suggesting hardly makes any musical sense.

-SD
eXZee
Lazy guitarist
Join date: Oct 2005
77 IQ
#9
Quote by SilentDeftone
^ And why is that?
-SD


Wait, wait. Now I'm confused.. what genre is this song? If it's Punk( I hope not ), then that is why I said take out the 3rd, because I've NEVER seen a punk song have in that extra note.
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eXZee
Lazy guitarist
Join date: Oct 2005
77 IQ
#11
Quote by SilentDeftone
Nowhere did he state that it's punk.

-SD



Lol, I read his name , and kind of figured that it was Punk.
I'd have to disagree about keeping it in though. Punk isn't really about the feeling, it's about the energy.
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SilentDeftone
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#12
I didn't say leaving it in would add to the feeling, I said it would make more musical sense, which really has nothing to do with performance/energy.

-SD
eXZee
Lazy guitarist
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#13
Quote by SilentDeftone
The 3rd, which you suggest removing, adds definition to the chord.
-SD


..Definition affects the feeling of a song.
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SilentDeftone
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#14
Quote by eXZee
..Definition affects the feeling of a song.

Even if that was true, removing the 3rd would then affect the feeling as well, which you have claimed to be inconsequential!

-SD
eXZee
Lazy guitarist
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#15
Quote by SilentDeftone
removing the 3rd would then affect the feeling as well
-SD


My point is; he goes from no 3rd to 3rd, I just think it would be better to not change from no 3rd to 3rd. Just an opinion.
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JCShark
Registered User
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#16
Why is this in there?

D|-1
A|-1
E|-0


it doesn't seem to make any sense at all
Gu!TaR PRo
Registered User
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#17
^ ya i agree with JCShark .. it doesnt sound right with that there
punk||conformed
phunker
Join date: Nov 2005
188 IQ
#18
Oh god, I tabbed it wrong! It's actually


G--------------------------------
D---------------2---------------
A---------------2---------------
E---------------0---------------


and the second/third powerchords in verse are supost to be on the A string instead of the E.
phpn00bf4life
Why give up?
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225 IQ
#19
Quote by SilentDeftone
Even if that was true, removing the 3rd would then affect the feeling as well, which you have claimed to be inconsequential!

-SD

I agree with him totally, punk or not, it makes more sense with the 3 in it.
Last edited by phpn00bf4life at Nov 13, 2005,
BlueZephyr
Music Junkie
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#20
the verse is definately heavier than the intro. anyway, i don't really like the intro. find the time signature for one and some of the notes seem outta place. i dont have an idea of how to flow the intro and verse. sorry.