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Join date: Jul 2004
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#2
The whole thing is a bit repeated. I really like the second half, just try to come up with some more melodic lines, take out some repeats, and add a new part to make up for the loss of the reapeats.
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Join date: Nov 2004
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#3
i liked it man. good job.
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Join date: Nov 2004
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#4
I loved it. I got bored of the repeats around the 4 minute mark though. Add more melody lines prehaps?
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#5
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Join date: Jun 2005
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#6
I was blown away by the lead parts.

completely blown away. wow.


Really nice work here. I'd love to hear a recording.
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#7
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Join date: Jun 2004
264 IQ
#8
Loved it. Absolutely loved it.

My only idea would be...

At staff 58, take out the rhythm guitar and just let the two leads play. I think it adds a sort of dramatic effect after the 3x repeat.

Overall, great.
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Spark1284
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Join date: Feb 2004
244 IQ
#9
hollyyy ****tt... this is just incredible, still got the classic mainstream styles alot, but i liek it regardless of my anitpop attitudes
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Join date: Oct 2004
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#10
awesome distorted parts. The beginning takes too long - but as it's a long progressive song with decent lyrics, I would expect a lot from it if you recorded it. Good stuff. I don't find it weird - it's really to my liking. Make another piece towards that direction - it's good.
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Egrodyne
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Join date: Mar 2004
103 IQ
#11
like most of it except bars 9-16, the chords just dont flow...i had a wee tinker around that area, but if u dont like what i surgested no worrys .....im not even sure about the changes i made myself lol
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