gdm09
UG's aspiring keyboardist
Join date: Jul 2005
5,139 IQ
#1
i wrote a song today. i was just wondering if you like it. its in drop d tuning, has about medium distortion, and is at 170 bpm. crit away!

Drop D
170 bpm
Medium Distortion


Intro


|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------| (x3) |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
  ... ... ... .......          ... ... .


Intro continued


|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|


Verse 1

|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------| (x3) |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
  ... ... ... .......          ... ... .

|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
  ... ... ... .......          ... ... .


Chorus


|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|


Verse 2


|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------| (x3) |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
  ... ... ... .......          ... ... .

|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
  ... ... ... .......          ... ... .


Chorus


|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|                  
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|


Solo


|----------------------------------|      |--------------|
|----------------------------------|      |--------------|
|-777-101010-121212-14141414141414-|      |-777-101010-7-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-x-x--x-x-x-x-x-x-x--| (x3) |-xxx-x-x-x--x-|
|-555-8-8-8--101010-12121212121212-|      |-555-8-8-8--5-|
|----------------------------------|      |--------------|

|----------------------------------| 
|----------------------------------|
|-777-101010-121212-14141414141414-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-x-x--x-x-x-x-x-x-x--|
|-555-8-8-8--101010-12121212121212-|
|----------------------------------|

|----------------------------------|
|----------------------------------|
|-777-101010-121212-17171717171717-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-x-x--x-x-x-x-x-x-x--|
|-555-8-8-8--101010-15151515151515-|
|----------------------------------|

|----------------------------------| 
|----------------------------------|
|-777-101010-121212-14141414141414-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-x-x--x-x-x-x-x-x-x--|
|-555-8-8-8--101010-12121212121212-|
|----------------------------------|

|--------------|
|--------------|
|-777-101010-7-|
|-xxx-x-x-x--x-|
|-555-8-8-8--5-|
|--------------|


Chorus


|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|---------------------|      |-----------|
|-000-333-555-7777777-| (x3) |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
|-000-333-555-7777777-|      |-000-333-0-|
piratepirate
shiver me timbers
Join date: Jun 2005
153 IQ
#2
ummm......really simple?

its basically the same thing over and over again, I wouldn't even go so far as to call it a song. There's no real structure, just some single note lines that become powerchords.

And how do you figure a few octave lines as a solo?

My advice would be to actually make a song out of it...its just the same thing over and over right now, its like you're not taking it in any musical direction.


while you're at it if you could check out mine http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=306282

i'd appreciate that.
NevermorePsalm
Steven Wilson's Hippy
Join date: Nov 2005
556 IQ
#3
Well, as pirate said, its not much of a song. YOu could take it in a The beautiful people direction, and have just a few repeated motifs that groove...but youd have to record it with dynamics so I could see how you did it. Work on it.
Crit mine if you can, the file is in one of my posts, look for it on the first page.
http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=306718
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sbikram
Registered User
Join date: Oct 2005
103 IQ
#4
I think the repetation of the notes make it boring. Use a little bit of octave patterns and A minor scale to get rid of same notes.
gdm09
UG's aspiring keyboardist
Join date: Jul 2005
5,139 IQ
#5
yeah, the repetition really bothered me. what could i do to make it better? (and not so repetitive)
gdm09
UG's aspiring keyboardist
Join date: Jul 2005
5,139 IQ
#6
Quote by sbikram
I think the repetation of the notes make it boring. Use a little bit of octave patterns and A minor scale to get rid of same notes.


how do i use the a minor scale to get rid of the same notes and if you could tell me what that scale is, thatd be awesome. thanks.
slipknot_69
What the ****
Join date: Feb 2005
76 IQ
#8
Well, yes a bit repetative. Maybe have a second guitar part in there. Maybe space some notes out a bit. something like this...


|-------------|
|-------------|
|-------------|
|--7-7--7-7-7--|
|--7-7--7-7-7--|
|--7-7--7-7-7--|
   * *    *       
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les_paul_01
UG Freak
Join date: Dec 2004
500 IQ
#9
there are heaps of links on UG about the minor scale. unfortunately i cant be bothered finding one now, but it shouldnt be too hard for you.
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