stevo192
user and abuser
Join date: Jun 2004
337 IQ
#2
dude, that song aint bad, it sounds kinda like early bink, but like carousel. Its pretty cool, would love to hear it with some lyrics and proper instruments

stevo192
hthedinga
Registered User
Join date: Nov 2005
1,536 IQ
#3
Here's some CRITICISM. Your song is too repetative. Take out some of those repeats and add some different chords progressions. Also, try to put a limit on the power chords, or if you're going to use them so much, do other things with them, such as having a lead guitar over them or an accoustic playing fuller chords.
Horvat
Gravis Metallus
Join date: Jun 2005
458 IQ
#4
I agree totally. WAY too repetitive. The main riff was ok but you totally overused it.
And yes, try playing something else over the power chords to make it more interesting, like some lead, or even some other chords.
zoltan256
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2005
1,028 IQ
#6
the intro sounds fine, something that would make a good 1st track in an album, but its long
and the intro part kinda goes on and on, and sorta annoying....

*i didnt see the newer version because i only have gp5
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Join date: Jan 2006
199 IQ
#7
I like it its nice
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slash_620
Drivin' at night
Join date: Jun 2004
579 IQ
#9
It's way to plain,dull/boring/repetitive.

It would sound ebtter with lryics but you haven't got lryics,so get creative.
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Join date: Jan 2006
1,482 IQ
#10
yeah, really reptitive, slow, boring, annoying. i would take some of the chords you hit like 40 times and hit them like 5 and speed the song up to make it more interesting.
young/young
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2006
76 IQ
#12
well i dont really see u helping anyone out badnflunz by just calling them gay, it may be ur sexuality but dont force it on us please, by the way tanks everyone for the crit i appreciate it