Mack56
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Join date: Apr 2003
1,077 IQ
#1
ok, this is a song i've been working on for a bit. I came up with the intro riff and it just sprang up from that. i'm not finished with the lyrics yet, so i can't post them.

Just a couple of things before you listen. First, read the preformance notes, it's important that you do to understand the song better.
Second, pretty much disregard the solo. It's all just stuff i put there to fill the space, I might use a little of it in real life, but for the most part I improvise. yeah, tell me what you think
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Last edited by Mack56 at Feb 1, 2006,
Dxking
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Join date: Jan 2006
345 IQ
#2
Um, yours is much better than either of my two, so I won't be able to give really great feedback. One of the things I thought of first was that it was a bit too repetetive. Like, a lot of the same stuff just in different pitches. That might've been what you were aiming for, so oh well lol. That's about the only thing I found wrong with it. Everything fits together in my opinion.
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Join date: Apr 2004
1,449 IQ
#3
That was rather brilliant, its not original but I wouldave liked it more if you put 1 last note at the end