#1
Im all crit for crit guys =)
Imagine it almost like a Fallout boy song.

Genetic,synthetic
selective breeding society
It's muddling, we're struggling
Find a peice of who your meant to be

Now scream!!
A little softer..
It's wrong!!
But thats the way it is..
Whisper!!
A little louder
Its wrong but don't go changing showbiz


Dying,trying
24/7 living nocturnely
We're choking,provoking
You know I'm speaking hypotheticly..
You know I'm speaking hypotheticly..

Now scream!!
A little louder..
It's right!!
The way it should have been
Whisper!!
A little softer..
It's good to say just what you mean


sorry,but not sympathetic,blaming it on pure genetic, we sawthe news and yes we stared,it's a shame we never cared,sorry for our rights and wrongs,sorry for the heavy songs, we've been sorry all along,no don't take it back just sing along!!
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#2
Hey. This is a damn good song, just dont let any1 steal it. I thnk u shud like get a copy right thng for it so tht no1 can come along and steal the sexy song.
We need 2 do this song in the band.
#3
thankyou =) luv ya calum
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#4
pretty good but it's pretty hard to see what's the song is about.
pretty good
and...fall out rules


*can you please crit my song "Falling in love again"
thanks
#5
Yeah fall out rules =p
Totally, anytime man, anytime.
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#6
'Sa pretty good song... I didn't really like the last bit though... I just don't like it when a song says sing along. But really good apart from that. I imagine it being quite mellow on the verses and pretty heavy on the chorus bit. Well done.
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#7
Correct Franz, in a way it sounds like F.O.B. But this can own them any day. I'm absolutely addicted to the chorus, it jsut seemed so original, imaginative, simple, effective and well written. I love it, thats my favorite part of this song. To be honest here, I liked the whole song, it seemed well thought out and written, God job! Overal about a 9/10.
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#8
Thankyou!
Thanx calvin, means alot to me coming from you, i respect you as a songwriter and everything, cuz you rawk.
And as for "sing along.." i dont really like it either so if anyone has any ideas..??
Thanx again for thee crits
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#9
Yeah this is really well done, quite easily the best work of yours that ive read, i can imagine how the song would go and i can just picture it fitting really well

good stuff
crit my latest (this home) if u can, cheers
#10
yeah sure no problem. All crit for crit me.
Thax again xxxxxx
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#11
*thanx
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#12
who ever said they couldn't understand what it was about should have read the title. it is a cool song though-definately my favourite out of your selection. specialy like the synthetic verse. shows off the fake plastic side
(god, i'm writting this like it's a piece of gcse critical analysis)