#1
These are just some lyrical ideas i threw down, not in order, but can you guys give a crit

of em, i just want to see what reaction is. The general theme is about a man whose skin was

torn off, exposing his flesh to sand, salt and vultures.
Again, just some ideas to see what you think. I will crit yours then.
Thanks.

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as the dead scalp burns on rotting corpses
smell of sickness waves on thunderous screams
skies split raining tears of blood
stench swelling stomachs
bloating
gut turning and spewing
twisting, turning, burning bile, splitting ears, stomach rising, acid bruns to your head,
melting the feel of reality

cold metal on his spine
he pulls from his back
collapsing skinless to the ground
salty fluids burn the flesh
etching marks of pain and hell

as the roaches pull the hair from his head
exposing the mess to the vultures
picking and chewing
vomiting
what let him live
scattering predators
hanging from rafters
as his smile clears

as the rain purs from the skies
he rises like a pheonix
soaring from the dirt
standing tall again

horns ripping the tendons
limbs become weak
muscles dripping like mercury
dripping to a puddle

sudden heat
he feels naked
clothes itch as tics bite
the feeling from his body
meat is torn
nerves stand open
letting him feel death
high
mighty
invincible
he sold his skin to the devil.

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DARK_MATTER, Instrumental Post-Metal from Ireland


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#3
Me too, its a fear ive always had. Thanks for the comment.
DARK_MATTER, Instrumental Post-Metal from Ireland


Bass:
Ibanez BTB 405QM
Ashdown PM600 - Peavey TVX 4x10
Russian Big Muff

Guitar:
Fender Jim Root sig
'99 Stagemaster 7-string
Yamaha F310
Hughes & Kettner Warp 7 w/4x12
#5
Cool. Skin is a name to a country song according to my mom. It's by some gay band that sounds like women faking orgasms.
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