#1
I posted this last week, but I re-wrote alot of it.
crit for crit, except i'm not very good at crit.

Intro

Verse 1

I didn't know you, I didn't see you.
I was way down, no-body cared (alone)
I ignored you, avoided you. (I Need you)
But now i see, you're what i need.
you make it better, you're better for me

Chorus

I saw you, I broke through. You saw me, It just had to be.
we're saving each-other, always be together.
we're saving each-other, forget what we used to be.
Cause we're better, we're better

Verse 2

Finally together, it's all for the better.
Kind of feels like it's been forever.
We're only just getting through, together.
Now we can see, we're always getting better.

Chorus

I saw you, I broke through. You saw me, It just had to be.
we're saving each-other, always be together.
we're saving each-other, Forget what we used to be.
Cause we're better, we're better.

Solo

Chorus

Outro
#2
i like the first verse and the call and response lyrics, but i don't think it should remain 1st person so it changes, the chorus seems awkward rhythmically to put to music, but im sure theres a way if you want to find it, 2nd verse i dont liek the way better comes up twice something about it jus dont seem right to me, and i think you should put in response lyrics in like the 1st verse to give some continuity, finally, i think it needs another verse, it seems incomplete with jus the 2, it needs a 3rd verse 2 tie it up, but i think that if you jus tidy some rough edges you'll have a great song
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#3
I just read it over, and I made this a while ago, it sounds kind of forced.
I think I should re-write the whole second verse, and some of the chorus.
Adding a 3rd verse might help aswell. I'll see what I can do.