#1
NO IT DOESN'T! Oh man, I fooled you assholes. Anyway, that angel line may go, maybe... I don't know if I like this or not... It's very pop-punk and borderline cheesy... Someone said they love it though, so that's a plus. Enjoy.

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I need to delve into some romance
I?ll call her name out from every window
Formed from fragility; Deceived by Naivety
We?ll move along fast and see how far we go

Oh and this Puerto Rican girl, goddamn!
With her short black hair and her skin so tan,
She doesn't love me, I?ll admit
But I locked her in a music box
Now that is where she sits?

It's like I'm floating on air,
I swear, I swear
Just for this summer, please
Our own lovely reprise?
And I swear, I swear, I swear
This will all be over before the year.

Meet me in the middle of the night
Therefore, I can hold you tight
Do the stars still dot the sky?
Is it possible I caught her eye?
I do not even mind,
If this is all it is...

It's like I'm floating on air,
I swear, I swear
Just for this summer, please
Our own lovely reprise?
And I swear, I swear, I swear
This will all be over before the year.

I have a book of matches
To light your cigarette
But baby I?ll strike mine first
And inhale all the poison for you?
Hopefully you won?t be able
To feel the cancerous vibes

It's like I'm floating on air,
I swear, I swear
Just for this summer, please
Our own lovely reprise?
And I swear, I swear, I swear
This will all be over before the year.

I?ll jump out?
A second floor window
Just for her attention.

I?ll dive out
A second floor window
Just to get her attention?
But no one wants to see an angel cry?

It's like I'm floating on air,
I swear, I swear
Just for this summer, please
Our own lovely reprise?
And I swear, I swear, I swear
This will all be over before the year.
Last edited by Retribution at May 7, 2006,
#3
Eh. It's alright. The rhyming got abrasive at points. Of course, love songs never really turn out that great to begin with, but there isn't much here that's really profound. Although I did like the chorus. It's technically not bad. But it's far from being good. I'd say you really need something to latch onto. It's a little all over the place right now.

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