#1
I just recorded a new tune, Take some time. You should give it a spin and send your hate mail my way. Its a tune about the homeless inspired just seeing the conditions in which they live when i went with my church to feed them. Give me your opinions and i will be forever grateful.

I would be more an happy to give a crit for a crit.

peace and love.
ben

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#2
Nice simple progression- the kind of stuff I've been getting into lately. The pitch on the voice starts off a bit off, but it seems to get better as the song goes on. Try warming up before you start. Otherwise I can't really flaw it. That's the advantage of those simple progressions. You can do anything with them- whether you put a full band over it or strip it back to guitar and vocals like this. Good job man, just work on your voice (like I need to do).

My song- Return to Sender (Hate)
#3
Thanbks man, the sad part is, i did warm up before i started. Yea, its sad. Im just starting to sing out and im really unsure of my voice. Thanks for the crit.
#4
The vocals have a nice "indie" hollow amateur sound to them right now.

Try adding more reverb and presence into the mix, it'll smooth things out quite a bit. And keep working on your voice.

Good song overall, enjoyed it.
Dude, where's your drums? Where's your drums dude? Dude, where's your drums? Dude.
#5
Thank you good sirs, this is my favorite song I have written so far. I plan to rerecord this soon in the future with a bit steadier vocals. Thanks for the reviews!
peace and love,
ben